Thursday, 8 November 2012

Long for yesterday

I need some feedback on this poem:

I long for yesterday

When the sky doesn`t quiver

The children sing and play

I`m going down the Mississippi river

 

The flashing light in my eyes

Eat me up inside

Consuming all the lies

There is nowhere to hide

 

Yeah to yesterday I long

I see the land so wide

Where there is no wrong

I see the land with pride

 

Deceit and corruption

Living day by day

Enormous eruption

I long for yesterday

 

In dreams I have today…

There is no thought to curse thee

No forming of the fray

Tomorrow

 I kneel

 to beg for mercy

Yesterday

 today

Today should be yesterday

Humanity hear me when I say

Love shall rise up from the grey

 

Suddenly

Not yesterday

But tomorrow came along the way

Hoping today

That tomorrow will not stay

 

A shower of bullets within the blink of an eye

Tomorrow is here to betray

Waiting for you to say goodbye

Yesterday has gone away